I´ve got some doubts in these texts. Could you check please ?

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Media training, personal stylist, public relations plan for presentation of spokesperson to potential partners and publishers. Suggestions of tariffs to vehicles of interest and daily relationship with leading journalists.

Suggestions for guidelines to vehicles of interest and daily relationship with leading journalists.
The President has become a trusted source to address issues related to the company as well as "green buildings" and sustainability. Lectures in international forums, such as Eco Power Conference Brazil and outstanding materials in vehicles as Época Negócios, Arquitetura &Construção, Época, Exame, in the newspapers Folha de S. Paulo, O Estado de S. Paulo, Valor Econômico and Zero Hora, Jornal Nacional, which assured the presence of the brand in the press surpassing the R$ 12 million a year in inching.

Clive · Accepted Answer

Hi,

Are these three related in any way? I think not.

What is your purpose in writing these? eg Are they titles or headings of some kind?

Clive

Alexandremelo · Answer

Only short texts. I am preparing a presentation. I just need to check if is everything right.

tks

alexandre

Clive · Answer

Hi,

This writing needs work. Here are a few comments.

Media training, personal stylist, public relations (<<< This is a list of two things and one person. Seems odd) plan for presentation of spokesperson to potential partners and publishers. Suggestions of tariffs to ('To' seems wrong. I wonder if you mean 'for'?) vehicles of interest and daily relationship with leading journalists.

The above are not sentences. For example, they need main verbs.

Each of the two sentences seems to talk about things that are not related.

Suggestions for guidelines to ( for? ) vehicles of interest and daily relationship with leading journalists.
The President has become a trusted source to address issues related to the company as well as "green buildings" and sustainability. Lectures in international forums, such as Eco Power Conference Brazil and outstanding materials in such vehicles as Época Negócios, Arquitetura &Construção, Época, Exame, in the newspapers Folha de S. Paulo, O Estado de S. Paulo, Valor Econômico and Zero Hora, Jornal Nacional, which assured the presence of the brand in the press surpassing the R$ 12 million a year in inching. This last sentence lacks a main verb.

Clive

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