I have underlined some problem areas and struck out portions that should be deleted; these latter may call for revision of the remaining text. An essay is not a conversation; it is a formal, carefully-written presentation of ideas: I don’t believe people should not serve 2 years in the military. A few reasons why, one not every citizens wants to be in the military.
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