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Cboutin3 Posted 13 years ago
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Is this worded correctly?
Khisanth then traveled with another black dragon known as Pteros for a time, before killing him in disgust over his cowardly actions in betraying her to other dragons.
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It seems all right to me. You might leave out the comma or change the wording a little. for a time, eventually killing him ...
- It seems all right to me.
- You might leave out the comma or change the wording a little.
- for a time, eventually killing him ...
- for a time, but [later / eventually] killed him ...
- CJ
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It seems all right to me. You might leave out the comma or change the wording a little.
... for a time, eventually killing him ...
... for a time, but [later / eventually] killed him ...
CJ
... for a time, eventually killing him ...
... for a time, but [later / eventually] killed him ...
CJ
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It seems to be only one action, but anyway the whole phrase and the rest of the sentence could be tightened:
Khisanth then traveled with Pteros, another black dragon, for a time, before killing him in disgust over his cowardly betrayal of her to other dragons.
Khisanth then traveled with Pteros, another black dragon, for a time, before killing him in disgust over his cowardly betrayal of her to other dragons.
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