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Bright Soul Posted 5 years ago
Grammar

Is this text correct by its grammar and understanding? I just need a feedback on my writing skill.

The first thing I saw, was my feet. I raised my head and saw an empty ground. Dry and soulless. The desert. The sun.The horizontal line. They all were around me. I had nothing in my mind. I heade' towards. (If what, it's the word "Headed." I wanted to pronounce this word like "Head" but having it in the past simple time. So I put the apostrophe and thus removes the "D" - voilà!) The existence of exhaustion had never left me.It was night but still The desert.And the line.Seems nothing has changed.So I stopped and looked down. From the ground lava was lifting and it covered everything.The body fell in and I finally felt something.It was.
  

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Bright Soul The first thing I saw, was my feet. Lose the comma. Bright Soul an empty ground You can't use ground that way.

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  • Bright Soul The first thing I saw, was my feet.
  • Lose the comma.
  • Bright Soul an empty ground You can't use ground that way.
  • It is an empty something, but not ground.
  • Only you know what it is.
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Bright SoulThe first thing I saw, was my feet.

Lose the comma.

Bright Soulan empty ground

You can't use ground that way. It is an empty something, but not ground. Only you know what it is.

Bright Soul (If what, it's the word "Headed." I wanted to pronounce this word like "Head" but havin
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