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Demart28 Posted 18 years ago
Grammar

is this text correct?

Please find my first post and question regarding text below.
Any suggestions and grammar/language misteakes found?
Many Thanks
Pawel

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am an experienced graphic designer currently looking for a permanent employment in London.
I was really impressed after viewing your portfolio included simple but sophisticated design.
I have studied for my degree at the Academy of Fine Arts in Krakow where I gained where I gained knowledge across a wide range of graphic design fields and I have strong artistic and technical abilities.
I have worked for number of advertising agencies and publishing houses, where I have been exposed to all aspects of the related media industries.
Since moving to the UK I have worked in a small publishing company - Kennedy's Publications Ltd.
I found your publishing company by chance walking along the river Thames however your activity haven't seen accidental (isn't accidental)
It would be a great honour join your company and become a part of a creative team.
Please find enclosed my CV and PDF portfolio.
If you have any questions, relating to my CV, please do not hesitate to contact me.
  

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I am an experienced graphic designer currently looking for a permanent employment in London. I was really impressed after viewing your portfolio included with simple but sophisticated design. I have studied for my degree at the Academy of Fine Arts in Krakow where I gained where I have gained knowledge across a wide range of graphic design fields and I have strong artistic and technical abilities.

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  • I am an experienced graphic designer currently looking for a permanent employment in London.
  • I was really impressed after viewing your portfolio included with simple but sophisticated design.
  • I have studied for my degree at the Academy of Fine Arts in Krakow where I gained where I have gained knowledge across a wide range of graphic design fields and I have strong artistic and technical abilities.
  • I have worked for a number of advertising agencies and publishing houses, where I have been exposed to all aspects of the related media industries.
  • Since moving to the UK, I have worked in a small publishing company - Kennedy's Publications Ltd.
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I am an experienced graphic designer currently looking for a permanent employment in London.
I was really impressed after viewing your portfolio included with simple but sophisticated design.
I have studied for my degree at the Academy of Fine Arts in Krakow where I gained where I have gained knowledge across a wide range of graphic design fields and I have strong ar
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Hi,
Here''s small, overall comment.
Your writing looks odd because you have set up each sentence as a separate paragraph. You need to combine related sentences into paragraphs. This will help the reader to see how you are organizing your thoughts on this topic.

Best wishes, Clive
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Thanks Clive for professional advice.
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Hi,
please find last version and I am waiting for comments and corrections.
Many thanks

I am an experienced graphic designer currently looking for a permanent employment in London.
I found your publishing company by chance walking along the river Thames.
However, to know your activity isn’t accidental.I was really impressed after viewing your portfolio with si
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Hi,

My comment about paragraphs remains the same. I've tried to create those, and added a few edits as well.

I am an experienced graphic designer currently looking for permanent employment in London.

I found your publishing company by chance while I was walking along beside the river Thames. However, my knowledge of your business is not accidental. I searched for and stu
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Thank you very much indeed!
I like your style and *** help me acheive similar language fluency...

Pawel
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CliveThese are the reasons it would be a great honour to join your company and become a part of your creative team. I believe that my previous experience has enabled me to work effectively and would give us mutual advantage.
Perhaps, the first sentence of the above paragraph can be slightly refined as follows:-

These are the reasons it woul
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