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Meanwhile, in the moorlands of Thar, Kardhel Terov, a fellthane of the Warlock Knights of Vaasa, approached Mhurren, the warlord of the Bloody Skulls orc tribe. Terov offered Mhurren complete control over Thar in exchange for an oath of fealty and an agreement not to endanger cities that would be put under Terov’s protection. Wanting to have a protected trade route from Vaasa to the Moonsea, Terov gained Mhurren the loyalty of several other Tharran tribes (the ogres of the Skullsmashers and the hobgoblins of the Red Claws), provided him with arms and armaments, and bolstered his forces with ten Warlock Knights as well as a number of strong monsters from the high mountains (such as manticores and wyverns) that were under their control.