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FYI- Bareris is the bard and Aoth is the battle wizard. Also at that time, Aoth met with Bareris to discuss his strange blindness, which could not be cured by either clerics or the bard, but allowed the battle wizard to see more than could be seen with normal sight. Aoth named Bareris the commander of the Griffon Legion as long as he could not see properly, but when he then looked upon his friend, he saw an illusionary image of Bareris dangling a marionette that resembled him and twitching the strings to make it dance. Aoth realized that Bareris had used magic to convince him to not leave Thay and confronted the bard with the truth, and afterward he was so disappointed and hurt that he shunned his comrade.