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Anonymous Posted 16 years ago
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Is this sentence written correctly
Due to my prior experience and knowledge in the marketing field, I believe I will be able to bring a fresh perspective conducive to attaining your expectations and goals as marketing assistant as well as promoting awareness of the healthcare received at Grand Strand Regional Medical Center and throughout the community.
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I don't find anything specifically wrong, but the sentence is so dang long, and contains so many expressions, it's impossible to sort out which are objects of which verbs and which modify which nouns. This results in serious ambiguity, and gives the impression that you're in over your head. You're not communicating.
- I don't find anything specifically wrong, but the sentence is so dang long, and contains so many expressions, it's impossible to sort out which are objects of which verbs and which modify which nouns.
- This results in serious ambiguity, and gives the impression that you're in over your head.
- You're not communicating.
- I have the impression that communication is very important in marketing.
- I'd suggest moving toward shorter, more direct sentences.
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I don't find anything specifically wrong, but the sentence is so dang long, and contains so many expressions, it's impossible to sort out which are objects of which verbs and which modify which nouns. This results in serious ambiguity, and gives the impression that you're in over your head. You're not communicating.
I have the impression that communication is very important in marketing.
I have the impression that communication is very important in marketing.
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