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Cboutin3 Posted 12 years ago
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Is this sentence worded and structured correctly, particularly the two "being" parts?

As the leader of the heroic companions, Tanis received the highest accolades from many different races for his triumphs during the war. These included being made an honorary Knight of the Rose and being given a breastplate from the Solamnic Knights, a green silk sash from the Silvanesti Wildrunners, and the Medallion of Kharas from the dwarves of Thorbardin.
  

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I think this is fine: As the leader of the heroic companions, Tanis received the highest accolades from many different races for his triumphs during the war. Some of them are an honorary Knighthood of the Rose, a breastplate from the Solamnic Knights, a green silk sash from the Silvanesti Wildrunners, and the Medallion of Kharas from the dwarves of Thorbardin.

— Vsuresh

  • I think this is fine: As the leader of the heroic companions, Tanis received the highest accolades from many different races for his triumphs during the war.
  • Some of them are an honorary Knighthood of the Rose, a breastplate from the Solamnic Knights, a green silk sash from the Silvanesti Wildrunners, and the Medallion of Kharas from the dwarves of Thorbardin.
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I think this is fine:

As the leader of the heroic companions, Tanis received the highest accolades from many different races for his triumphs during the war. Some of them are an honorary Knighthood of the Rose, a breastplate from the Solamnic Knights, a green silk sash from the Silvanesti Wildrunners, and the Medallion of Kharas from the dwarves of Thorbardin.
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