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Anonymous Posted 11 years ago
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Is this sentence gramatically well-worded?
Hi!
Is this sentence gramatically well-worded?
According to the decision made by the court on November 1, 2004 in matter No.556GG, enforced on November 3, 2004, custody rights over his daughter, Jane XX, was removed for John XX, and custody rights over his daughter, Cinty YY, was removed for Bil YY.
Is there other way how to write it?
Thanks!
Is this sentence gramatically well-worded?
According to the decision made by the court on November 1, 2004 in matter No.556GG, enforced on November 3, 2004, custody rights over his daughter, Jane XX, was removed for John XX, and custody rights over his daughter, Cinty YY, was removed for Bil YY.
Is there other way how to write it?
Thanks!
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There is always another way to write this. 556GC, made on Nov. 1, 2004 and enforced on Nov.
- There is always another way to write this.
- 556GC, made on Nov.
- 1, 2004 and enforced on Nov.
- 3, John XX lost his custodial rights over his daughter Jane XX and Bill YY lost custodial rights over his daughter Cinty YY.
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There is always another way to write this. Here is one possibility:
According to the court's decision on issue No.556GC, made on Nov. 1, 2004 and enforced on Nov. 3, John XX lost his custodial rights over his daughter Jane XX and Bill YY lost custodial rights over his daughter Cinty YY.
According to the court's decision on issue No.556GC, made on Nov. 1, 2004 and enforced on Nov. 3, John XX lost his custodial rights over his daughter Jane XX and Bill YY lost custodial rights over his daughter Cinty YY.
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