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Naumira Posted 16 years ago
Grammar

Is this sentence effective or not?

Hi, can I say this sentence? and which one is inappropriate?

He is one of of the few non-medical professionals I know who is genuine interested to use his professional background to contribure to efforts to counter the Indonesian HIV epidemic.
  

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You almost got it. The core idea is there but the sentence has too many verbs which actually created the opposite effect. naumira I took the liberty to revised the ending part to smooth out the sentence.

— Dimsumexpress

  • You almost got it.
  • The core idea is there but the sentence has too many verbs which actually created the opposite effect.
  • naumira I took the liberty to revised the ending part to smooth out the sentence.
  • He is one of of the few non-medical professionals I know , who is genuine ly interested in using his professional background to join the fight against the HIV epidemic in Indonesia .
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You almost got it. The core idea is there but the sentence has too many verbs which actually created the opposite effect.
naumira I took the liberty to revised the ending part to smooth out the sentence.

He is one of of the few non-medical professionals I know, who is genuinely
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oh really did you take the liberty? congratulation
thanks for your prompting. now the confusing sentence has became clear now. thanks alot dimsumexpress
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Here is how I would write this sentence, Naumira:

He is one of the few non-medical professionals I know who is genuinely interested in using his professional background to help counter the Indonesian HIV epidemic.

1.) GENUINELY is an adverb that modifies the participle INTERESTED. You need the LY.

2.) Standard English usage would say INTERESTING I
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of course your comment is very helpful, thanks alot Grammar Glitch, see you then
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