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Endeavour Posted 14 years ago
Grammar

Is this sentence correct to say

  1. Enhance self-esteem and confidence to the utmost, for these are the most important elements for succeeding. Besides, these, I believe, are too the elements that have an effect on my English ability.
I especially would like to ask is it apt to insert "I believe" in the middle of a clause as the above. I believe it is all right because when I rearrange the sentence, it's just like "I believe that these are..." Am I correct?

If so, then oh, English is such an elegant language. Emotion: smile

Thank you.
  

Top answer

Hello Endeavour, Your sentences seem awkward and stilted. I understand what you wish to communicate, but I suggest that there are less stiff and more graceful ways to get your point across. Please consider the following: Enhancing self-esteem and confidence are the most important elements of success.

— JohnParis

  • Hello Endeavour, Your sentences seem awkward and stilted.
  • I understand what you wish to communicate, but I suggest that there are less stiff and more graceful ways to get your point across.
  • Please consider the following: Enhancing self-esteem and confidence are the most important elements of success.
  • Moreover, I believe that they have an important effect on my ability to speak and write English properly.
  • This is only one suggestion out of many possibilities.
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Hello Endeavour,

Your sentences seem awkward and stilted. I understand what you wish to communicate, but I suggest that there are less stiff and more graceful ways to get your point across. Please consider the following:

Enhancing self-esteem and confidence are the most important elements of success. Moreover, I believe that they have an important effect on my ability to speak an
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