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Cboutin3 Posted 13 years ago
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This action accomplished two goals for Fistandantilus, one that he could now direct the Kingpriest, and secondly he would be allowed to study a Portal to the Abyss secretly.
  

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cboutin3 This action accomplished two goals for Fistandantilus, one that he could now direct the Kingpriest, and one that he would be allowed to study a Portal to the Abyss secretly. The problem was lack of parallel structure. The comma after 'Kingpriest' is optional.

— Philip

  • cboutin3 This action accomplished two goals for Fistandantilus, one that he could now direct the Kingpriest, and one that he would be allowed to study a Portal to the Abyss secretly.
  • The problem was lack of parallel structure.
  • The comma after 'Kingpriest' is optional.
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cboutin3 This action accomplished two goals for Fistandantilus, one that he could now direct the Kingpriest, and one that he would be allowed to study a Portal to the Abyss secretly.
The problem was lack of parallel structure. The comma after 'Kingpriest' is optional.
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Thanks, could I say "This action accomplished two goals for Fistandantilus, firstly/first that he could now direct the Kingpriest, and second/secondly he would be allowed to study a Portal to the Abyss secretly."?
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