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"The concussion to academic vocation as the change of academic field is so huge that university teachers are differentiated in profession and power."

The author wants to express that changes of academic field impact the academic vocation a lot and teachers are differentiated according to their positions in profession or administration.
But I am not sure about the use of "as...", it sounds a little weird to me. is that correct? how to explain this in grammar?

thanks a lot!

Dave_anon · Accepted Answer

Hi

It is not a great sentence. The word "concussion" is usually reserved for an injury to the head and it doesn't really work as a metaphor. If I understand the meaning correctly, I think I would say ...

- The impact on the academic profession is huge: it will greatly change the status of university teachers

Dave

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MrGuedes · Answer

Yes, it's wrong. As is a conjunction. (When it's a conjunction, it basically has the same meaning as because, so you can easily replace it with because, and maybe you'll understand better what I mean) A conjunction is a particle that connects clauses. Clauses are, basically, sentences. The 1st part of the sentence is not really a sentence, because it has no verb. That's why it sounds weird. To improve it, the author can do 2 things:

1) Turn the 1st clause into a real sentence by adding a verb to it. For example, "There is concussion to academic power, as the change of academic field [...]".

OR

2) Replace the conjunction as for something else that's not a conjunction, but that will have the same meaning. For example, "The concussion to academic vocation is due to the change of academic field [...]".

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