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Sentence: Well on the fiscal cliff, I will criticize both Republicans and Democrats. On bipartisanship, the record of both parties is not exemplary.Question: Is this sentence correct?Thanks

CalifJim · Accepted Answer

AnonymousIs this sentence correct?

It's two sentences, and they are understandable, but I would change them a little. "... both ... not ..." is awkward.

Well, concerning the 'fiscal cliff', I would criticize both Republicans and Democrats. Neither party has an exemplary record on bipartisanship.

CJ

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CalifJim AnonymousIs this sentence correct?It's two sentences, and they are understandable, but I would change them a little. "... both ... not ..." is awkward.Well, concerning the 'fiscal cliff', I would criticize both Republicans and Democrats. Neither party has an exemplary record on bipartisanship.CJ

Thanks for that. Was my sentence grammatically wrong in the exact form?

"Will" cannot be used in place of "would" there?

And was the use "on", instead of "concerning", making my sentence wrong?

Genuine doubts and questions. No issue with the edit.

CalifJim · Answer

AnonymousWas my sentence grammatically wrong

No.

Anonymous"Will" cannot be used in place of "would" there?

will is less idiomatic — unless you say this at the beginning of a lecture as a way of telling your audience what you will talk about during the lecture, for example. wouldis much better for giving your opinion.

Anonymousthe use "on", instead of "concerning" ... wrong?

No, not wrong. But in my opinion, it does not effectively block the comic effect of the literal meaning of being "on a cliff", as if about to commit suicide by jumping. Had it been another expression, and not cliff, I probably would not have removed on.

CJ

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CalifJim AnonymousWas my sentence grammatically wrongNo.Anonymous"Will" cannot be used in place of "would" there?will is less idiomatic — unless you say this at the beginning of a lecture as a way of telling your audience what you will talk about during the lecture, for example. wouldis much better for giving your opinion.Anonymousthe use "on", instead of "concerning" ... wrong?No, not wrong. But in my opinion, it does not effectively block the comic effect of the literal meaning of being "on a cliff", as if about to commit suicide by jumping. Had it been another expression, and not cliff, I probably would not have removed on.CJ

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