Is this sentence correct?

Hi,
could you please tell me if the sentence works?

He is envious of what seems to her obvious and natural and of what she doesn’t need to reflect on.

The first part is quite stylish. It doesn't fit well with the more casual second part.

Consider just deleting the second part,as it seems to me awkward

Thank you, Clive.

Would it be better I wrote: (...) and of what requires no reflection on her part?

Deleting is also an interesting option to consider but I wanted to ask if rewriting the sentence the way I suggested above does the trick too.

Beni

AnonymousHe is envious of what seems to her obvious and natural and of what she doesn’t need to reflect on.

Just my passing two cents...
Even with the rewrite, this is still not a well conceived sentence because the meaning seems quite muddled in my opinion.
The word "envious", as used, doesn't seem to have a

That's an interesting point. I agree that my sentence my not be straightforward. This is because the object of envy is not stated. Let's assume he's poor and she's rich (and has always been). Would you accept my sentence then?

AnonymousLet's assume he's poor and she's rich (and has always been). Would you accept my sentence then?

Unfortunately, my answer is still the same. We envy others for many tangible and non-tangible things which are real. As you have demonstrated in your assumption: He is poor and she is rich. Therefore, we can say : He is envious of her because she is rich. O

I find it interesting that you and Clive have different opinions about the sentence.Perhaps this is yet another British/American difference. Are you British or American, grammarfreak?

Just one more question - do you find "I am envious of her because she is rich" and "I am envious of her wealth" equally correct?

Regards
Beni

AnonymousJust one more question - do you find "I am envious of her because she is rich" and "I am envious of her wealth" equally correct?

Yes, both correct. But the latter meant " only her wealth", which is different than "because she is rich".

I had to read it about six times to understand what I can only guess you thought it meant when you wrote it. My guess is that you were trying to say that he envied her her talent. The way you put it, though, he was envious of two unnamed things, one of which seemed to her obvious and natural, and the other, she didn't need to reflect on, whatever that means. So my answer is no, the sentence does n

Hello enoon,

thank you for the post.

After a comment from Clive my original sentence was changed to "He was envious of what seemed to her obvious and natural and of what required no reflection on her part"

In a post to grammarfreak, who kindly expressed his negative opinion about the sentence, I mentioned that the object of hisenvy was not very important. It may be tale