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Anonymous Posted 16 years ago
Grammar

Is this sentence correct?

Hello,

My native language is not English and it would be very nice if a native speaker could tell me if the following sentence is correct. Does it sound "weird", or "not English enough" maybe?... Please tell me, thanks in advance.
StartFragment>Keen on image processing and video analysis, I would like to do a two- to six-month long internship in your company, in order to discover thoroughly the specificities of the trade and to put into practice my academic knowledge.
  

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It's more natural than most. The word "long" is unnecessary. " in order to discover thoroughly the specificities of the trade "specificities" is a little much.

  • It's more natural than most.
  • The word "long" is unnecessary.
  • " in order to discover thoroughly the specificities of the trade "specificities" is a little much.
  • " Perhaps it suggests you want to do it your way instead of their way.
  • I'm not sure.
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It's more natural than most.

The word "long" is unnecessary.

I think I'd say "with your company."

in order to discover thoroughly the specificities of the trade

"specificities" is a little much.

Perhaps, "in order to explore in detail the specific workings of the trade."

"Explor
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Thank you Avangi!

Aaah that sentence is tricky
It's a direct translation from a sentence I wrote in my native tongue (French), but it doesn't sound really presumptuous in French. Can you think of another way to say it without having it sound presumptuous? (don't hesitate to modify it, even if the meaning is not exactly the same afterwards). And also modify it in a way that it doesn'
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Anybody? .. Please?
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Keen on image processing and video analysis, I would like to apply for an internship with your company to learn more about (the practicalities of) the trade and to put into practice my academic knowledge.

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