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Cboutin3 Posted 13 years ago
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During the powerful storm that signaled the beginning of the War of Souls, a force of ogres attacked Alhana’s band near the border of Silvanesti, and Silvanoshei volunteered to go request help from a Legion of Steel outpost that was nearby. Alhana reluctantly allowed him to depart on the mission, and he subsequently disappeared during the journey.
  

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During the powerful storm that signaled the beginning of the War of Souls, a force of ogres attacked Alhana’s band near the border of Silvanesti, and Silvanoshei volunteered to go and request help from a Legion of Steel outpost nearby. Alhana reluctantly allowed him to depart on the mission, but he subsequently disappeared during the journey.

  • During the powerful storm that signaled the beginning of the War of Souls, a force of ogres attacked Alhana’s band near the border of Silvanesti, and Silvanoshei volunteered to go and request help from a Legion of Steel outpost nearby.
  • Alhana reluctantly allowed him to depart on the mission, but he subsequently disappeared during the journey.
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During the powerful storm that signaled the beginning of the War of Souls, a force of ogres attacked Alhana’s band near the border of Silvanesti, and Silvanoshei volunteered to go and request help from a Legion of Steel outpost nearby. Alhana reluctantly allowed him to depart on the mission, but he subsequently disappeared during the journey.

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