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Thank you for your message. Yeah, you have already got my new address. As you may remember, I have already given you my current address in Poland and you sent me one time an invitation card to my new address which I am still living there.

Actually, the most problematic part is getting a visa than buying airplane ticket. Since, I want to come there with my girlfriend so both of us want to apply for a visa together. At this moment, she does not have job so I am waiting that she get a new job. Then, we can both apply for the visa at the same time. Without having a job, a visa officer probably will reject our visa because it is important for them to see that we guarantee to come back to Poland after visiting the US. Since, I have most of my family in the US they may think that we will stay and not return back to Poland again.

Thank you for offering me your assistant to get my ticket. But as I told you the problem for us is to become 100 % sure that we have a chance to get a visa. Otherwise, if we will be rejected then It would be difficult for us to apply for a second time. I will let you know in advance whenever we got the visa.

Kouroshh · Accepted Answer

Can anyone help me out please?

Perfect Stranger · Answer

I'd say...

Thank you for your message. Yes, you already have my new address. As you probably remember, I gave you my current Polish address a while ago and you sent me an invitation card to that address. I'm still living there. Actually, the most problematic part is getting a visa. Buying an airplane ticket is not really a problem. Since I would like to come with my girlfriend, we'd have to apply for our visas together, at the same time. Due to the fact that she doesn't have a job right now, the visa officer might probably reject our application. It's important for them to see that there's something here in Poland for us to go back to after visiting the US. Since I have most of my family in the US, they might think we are planning to stay there and not return to Poland. Thank you for offering me your assistance to get the tickets, but as I've said, the problem for is is to make sure that we can get the visa. Otherwise, if we get rejected, then it'd be difficult for us to apply for it again. I will let you know as soon as we get the visa/s.

PS Pozdrowienia dla kolegi Polaka

Philip · Answer

probably reject This is self-contradictory. Typo: is is, difficult for us to apply ~~for it~~ again.

Perfect Stranger · Answer

Sorry about the typos. I was typing fast. Thanks Philip!

Kouroshh · Answer

Should something else instead of (probably reject) be used dear Philip in this text?

Philip · Answer

I'm getting sloppy. Sorry. I should have said that might probably is self-contradictory. Go with either might reject or will probably reject.

Perfect Stranger · Answer

Philip, may I ask why you think that might probably is self-contradictory? I've heard those two words written or uttered together quite a few times. Thanks.

Philip · Answer

I understand might to be "possibly" and probably to mean "quite certainly".

Anonymous · Answer

This is my observation. you need to pay more attention in tense management, punctuation and try not to get too "perfect" with every sentence. This is my suggested version:

Thank you for your message. If I remember correctly, I had given you my current address in Poland because I received an invitation card from you on one occasion which was sent to my new address in Poland.

Actually, the most problematic part is getting a visa than buying (an) airplane ticket. Since, (no comma)I want to go come there with my girlfriend, (comma) we want to apply for a visa together. However, she does not have (a) job at this moment, (comma) so I have to wait until ~~am waiting that~~ she get a ~~new~~ job (before ). ~~Then, we~~ can both apply for the visa at the same time. Without having a job, (our) a visa applications ~~officer~~ probably will be rejected ~~our visa~~ because it is important for immigration office to see that we ~~guarantee~~to come back to Poland after visiting the US. Since, (again no comma) I have most of my family ( living) in the US, (comma here) they may think that we will stay behind illegally and not return back to Poland ~~again~~.

Thank you for offering me your assistant (in getting) ~~to get~~ my ticket. But as I mentioned, the problem for us is to make 100 % sure that we can ~~have a chance to~~ get a visa. ~~Otherwise~~, If we are rejected, (comma) then It would be difficult for us to apply for (the) a second time. I will let you know when we receive the visa.

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