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Anonymous Posted 12 years ago
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Is this punctuation fine?

"Where finding a cure had once been like seeking a solution to one of my engineering problems, I now see that there is so much more to medicine, and seeking that knowledge has, and will continue to, fulfill me in a way engineering never could. "

I know the sentence is bit long, but I like the "Where...." structure and it fits better with what came before it. My question is do you think the punctuation is OK?
  

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You have a few problems. I suggest eg "Whereas finding a cure was once like seeking a solution to one of my engineering problems, I now see that there is so much more to medicine, and seeking that knowledge has fulfilled me and will continue to fulfill me in a way engineering never could. " OR " .

— Clive

  • You have a few problems.
  • I suggest eg "Whereas finding a cure was once like seeking a solution to one of my engineering problems, I now see that there is so much more to medicine, and seeking that knowledge has fulfilled me and will continue to fulfill me in a way engineering never could.
  • " OR " .
  • .
  • seeking that knowledge fulfills me in a way engineering never could.
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You have a few problems.
I suggest
eg "Whereas finding a cure was once like seeking a solution to one of my engineering problems, I now see that there is so much more to medicine, and seeking that knowledge has fulfilled me and will continue to fulfill me in a way engineering never could. "
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Thank you so much! Your rewrite is great. Do you mind explaining what's the difference between where and whereas in this case? Thank you!
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'Whereas' here suggests a stronger contrast.
It also adds more style to your sentence, which I assume you want..

Clive
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Absolutely! Thank you so much for your help. Two thumbs up! Emotion: yes
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Is this punctuation fine?
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