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Cboutin3 Posted 13 years ago
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Tol and his comrades rejoined the Daltigoth soldiers outside of Old Port, and the small horde then journeyed into the Sentinel Mountains, which was where XimXim’s lair was located. The Ergothians divided into search bands and quickly discovered XimXim’s cave. Tol, Mandes, and the Dom-shu sisters entered the empty cave to scout out the monster’s lair; however, during their exploration, XimXim returned. The Ergothians outside of the cave battled XimXim, but were unable to inflict any major damage on the giant insect.
  

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Tol and his comrades rejoined the Daltigoth soldiers outside Old Port, and the army then journeyed into the Sentinel Moun tains, where XimXim’s lair was located. The Ergothia ns, dividing into search ban ds, qu ickly discovered XimXim’s cave. Tol, Mandes, and the Dom-shu sisters entered the empty cave, but d uring their exploration, XimXim returned.

  • Tol and his comrades rejoined the Daltigoth soldiers outside Old Port, and the army then journeyed into the Sentinel Moun tains, where XimXim’s lair was located.
  • The Ergothia ns, dividing into search ban ds, qu ickly discovered XimXim’s cave.
  • Tol, Mandes, and the Dom-shu sisters entered the empty cave, but d uring their exploration, XimXim returned.
  • The Ergothians outside the cave battled XimXim , but inflicted no major damage on the giant insect.
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Tol and his comrades rejoined the Daltigoth soldiers outside Old Port, and the army then journeyed into the Sentinel Mountains, where XimXim’s lair was located. The Ergothians, dividing into search bands, quickly discovered XimXim’s cave. Tol, Mandes, and the Dom-shu sisters entered the empty cave, but during their exploration, XimXim returned. The Ergo

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