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Thomas Schlag Posted 21 years ago
Grammar
Is this phrase grammatically correct?
Hello,
I am busy with job applications for a consultant and I'm thinking
whether the phrase
"This specialized consulting being usually provided directly at the
clients` offices, I am required and used to integrate rapidly and
efficiently existing teams of developers as well as businesses."
is grammatically correct. My problem is to understand, whether the
first part of the phrase before the comma can be written in this way.
I ask you kindly for an advise whether or not the phrase is correct.
As an alternative I think the phrase could be:
"I am required and used to integrate rapidly and efficiently existing
teams of developers as well as businesses in this specialized consulting
being usually provided directly at the clients` offices."
Thank you very much!!
If there are any questions about german grammar on your side, please
send me an e-mail and I promptly will give you an answer!
Thomas
I am busy with job applications for a consultant and I'm thinking
whether the phrase
"This specialized consulting being usually provided directly at the
clients` offices, I am required and used to integrate rapidly and
efficiently existing teams of developers as well as businesses."
is grammatically correct. My problem is to understand, whether the
first part of the phrase before the comma can be written in this way.
I ask you kindly for an advise whether or not the phrase is correct.
As an alternative I think the phrase could be:
"I am required and used to integrate rapidly and efficiently existing
teams of developers as well as businesses in this specialized consulting
being usually provided directly at the clients` offices."
Thank you very much!!
If there are any questions about german grammar on your side, please
send me an e-mail and I promptly will give you an answer!
Thomas
Top answer
The meaning of what you have written is extremely difficult to perceive. Both sentences you have proposed are so complex that it is impossible to understand what you are trying to say. I strongly advise that you change your style of English writing.
- The meaning of what you have written is extremely difficult to perceive.
- Both sentences you have proposed are so complex that it is impossible to understand what you are trying to say.
- I strongly advise that you change your style of English writing.
- Instead of writing long sentences that make multiple points, write short sentences, each sentence making a single point.
- I will illustrate the advice I am giving by using this example.
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The meaning of what you have written is extremely difficult to perceive. Both sentences you have proposed are so complex that it is impossible to understand what you are trying to say.
I strongly advise that you change your style of English writing. Instead of writing long sentences that make multiple points, write short sentences, each sentence making a single point.
I will
I strongly advise that you change your style of English writing. Instead of writing long sentences that make multiple points, write short sentences, each sentence making a single point.
I will
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Hello taiwandave,
thank you very much for your good advise.
You are absolutly right! It is much more important that
the meaning is easy to understand than just the grammatical
correctness. Your example for a point-form list you have sent
is exactly what I want to say.
I thank you very much your help.
Best regards
Thomas
sorry I
thank you very much for your good advise.
You are absolutly right! It is much more important that
the meaning is easy to understand than just the grammatical
correctness. Your example for a point-form list you have sent
is exactly what I want to say.
I thank you very much your help.
Best regards
Thomas
sorry I
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Here's how I would phrase it:
I am engaged in delivering specialized consulting services, usually on-site at clients' facilities. I manage both existing teams of developers and outside contractors, and I am responsible for ensuring that solutions are delivered rapidly and efficiently.
I am engaged in delivering specialized consulting services, usually on-site at clients' facilities. I manage both existing teams of developers and outside contractors, and I am responsible for ensuring that solutions are delivered rapidly and efficiently.
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Hello taiwandave,
thank you a lot! This is a good suggestion, I will take this for my
candidature. It's easy to understand and helps me to make a good
impression to the receiver!
If you once may have any issues about the german language, just
send me an email to Email Removed (I don't know whether
there is similar forum for germa
thank you a lot! This is a good suggestion, I will take this for my
candidature. It's easy to understand and helps me to make a good
impression to the receiver!
If you once may have any issues about the german language, just
send me an email to Email Removed (I don't know whether
there is similar forum for germa
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