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FYI- Gol'fanin is the blacksmith. Shortly thereafter, in the throne room of Gauntlgrym, the dead dwarf battlerager Thibbledorf Pwent returned to life as a vampire. Meanwhile, Invidoo’s replacement imp revealed himself to be Druzil, a servant of the balor Errtu, whose one hundred years of banishment from the Prime Material Plane were almost over and was plotting his vengeance on Drizzt. In the forge room of Gauntlgrym, Gol'fanin revealed to Tiago that the drow he thought was an agent of Bregen D'aerthe was actually Drizzt Do'Urden. The blacksmith explained that the sword and shield that he was forging would give Tiago the power to become the weapons master of House Baenre, but the head of Drizzt would make him a legend.