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FYI- Entreri is the assassin. Meanwhile, Berellip interrogated Entreri about Drizzt’s whereabouts and brutally beat the assassin when he did not provide her with the answers that she wanted. Shortly thereafter, Gromph and Methil left Quenthel’s party and returned to Gauntlgrym, where the illithid intruded into Dahlia’s mind in order to discover the last place that she had seen Drizzt. Methil and Gromph learned that Dahlia thought that Drizzt was with the dwarves in Icewind Dale, and also realized that the elf would have an important role in Lolth’s plans. Tiago, Saribel, and her brother Ravel, the leader of House Xorlarrin’s wizards, magically spied upon the interrogation of Dahlia and discerned Drizzt’s supposed whereabouts.