Is this passage okay? )

Hi everyone! Just trying to write in English and need native speakers to check the text's readability. So, here we go if you please...

"The night was filled with slightly chilly air of early spring.
The typical city's sounds, those of speeding cars, leaving
behind choking, rushing skyward whiffs of dust, and people's
constant buzzing chatter, were slowly dying away. Weakening
hollow din was retreating, it seemed, to the distant, menacing
outskirts, where it was kept in dark and damp, enormous
underground chamber by some powerful, shadowlike guard
until morning light..."