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Cboutin3 Posted 12 years ago
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Is this passage all worded correctly?

Caramon’s twin brother, Raistlin, was born shortly after him, but the pregnancy was very hard on Rosamun, and the twins were taken care of by their older half-sister, Kitiara Uth Matar. Since Rosamun was prone to lapse into a comatose state on a regular basis, and Gilon was away cutting wood for long periods of time, the twins were raised for the most part by Kitiara. A popular youth, Caramon spent his formative years playing with the other children in Solace, and protecting his frail brother from bullying.
  

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I see no need for the final comma, but it' okay, I guess. Was the pregnancy hard on Rosamun, or was it the delivery ? Perhaps both, but I think you need to make it clearer.

— Philip

  • I see no need for the final comma, but it' okay, I guess.
  • Was the pregnancy hard on Rosamun, or was it the delivery ?
  • Perhaps both, but I think you need to make it clearer.
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I see no need for the final comma, but it' okay, I guess. Was the pregnancy hard on Rosamun, or was it the delivery? Perhaps both, but I think you need to make it clearer.
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