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Cboutin3 Posted 13 years ago
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After Miya and Kiya saved Tol from freezing to death, they began the long journey to the Dom-shu’s home in the Great Green, where they could find a haven to heal and rest. Tol swore that one day he would return to Daltigoth and save both Valaran and the empire from Nazramin’s malice. Tol and the Dom-shu sisters departed Daltigoth in the depth of winter and during a snowstorm. Miya, who had given birth to a son whom she named Eli shortly after Elicarno’s death, was still weak from the pregnancy, and Tol was suffering from the terrible wounds that had been inflicted on him by Nazramin’s Wolves. Kiya managed to bring them all across the empire’s snowy plains and through the Great Green until they reached the Dom-shu village. Tol was shamed by the beating, and grieved the loss of Valaran, who was now consort to the new emperor.
  

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After Miya and Kiya saved Tol from freezing to death, they began the long journey to the Dom-shu’s home in the Great Green, a haven in which to heal and rest. Tol swore that one day he would return to Daltigoth and save both Valaran and the empire from Nazramin’s malice. He and the Dom-shu sisters departed Daltigoth in the depth of winter and during a snowstorm.

  • After Miya and Kiya saved Tol from freezing to death, they began the long journey to the Dom-shu’s home in the Great Green, a haven in which to heal and rest.
  • Tol swore that one day he would return to Daltigoth and save both Valaran and the empire from Nazramin’s malice.
  • He and the Dom-shu sisters departed Daltigoth in the depth of winter and during a snowstorm.
  • Miya, who had borne a son named Eli shortly after Elicarno’s death, was still weak from her pregnancy, and Tol was suffering from the terrible wounds inflicted by Nazramin’s Wolves.
  • Kiya managed to bring them all across the snowy plains and through the Great Green until they reached the Dom-shu village.
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After Miya and Kiya saved Tol from freezing to death, they began the long journey to the Dom-shu’s home in the Great Green, a haven in which to heal and rest. Tol swore that one day he would return to Daltigoth and save both Valaran and the empire from Nazramin’s malice. He and the Dom-shu sisters departed Daltigoth in the depth of winter and during a snowstorm. Miya, who had borne a son named

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