Is this paragrpah worded in the proper way?

FYI- Szass Tam is the lich and Nymia and Milsantos are the two governors. Besides Surthay and Gauros, Szass Tam also controlled High Thay and Lapendrar, so Azhir and Homen’s host was granted free passage south and their progress was kept a secret from the Council of Zulkirs. However, Malark discovered Szass Tam’s plans and alerted Dmitra, who then sent him to the Keep of Thazar to meet with Nymia and Milsantos and convince them to oppose the undead wizard. After speaking with Malark, the two governors decided to side with the Council of Zulkirs and ordered their forces to march to Priador. Nymia also instructed Aoth and the company of griffon riders to harass Szass Tam’s legions in order to slow their advance and keep them from reaching Bezantur before the Council of Zulkirs could assemble a sufficient army to oppose them.