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Cboutin3 Posted 12 years ago
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Is this paragraph worded correctly?

FYI- Pwent is the vampire/undead dwarf. The five companions soon reached the upper levels of the ancient dwarven complex, where they battled several bands of goblins, hobgoblins, and bugbears who served the Xorlarrins while they searched for Pwent. After defeating a large number of goblinkin, they encountered Pwent, who could seldom control the monstrous tendencies of his curse and attacked them. After a brief fight, Catti-brie tried to capture Pwent’s soul, but the magic was unsuccessful and the undead dwarf escaped.
  

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cboutin3 who could seldom control the monstrous tendencies of his curse , and he attacked them. The modifier "seldom" doesn't apply to this second verb, so I think it needs to be separated. It makes for smoother reading.

— Philip

  • cboutin3 who could seldom control the monstrous tendencies of his curse , and he attacked them.
  • The modifier "seldom" doesn't apply to this second verb, so I think it needs to be separated.
  • It makes for smoother reading.
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cboutin3 who could seldom control the monstrous tendencies of his curse, and he attacked them.
The modifier "seldom" doesn't apply to this second verb, so I think it needs to be separated. It makes for smoother reading.
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