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In 1479 DR, Geran, accompanied by Hamil, returned to Hulburg for the first time in ten years after learning of the murder of Jarad. Unlike Geran, Jarad had remained in Hulburg for the last decade, and became the captain of the Shieldsworn, the harmach’s guards, until his death while investigating a series of crypt-breaking in the barrowfields outside of the town. Tomb-breaking was one of the most serious crimes in Hulburg due to Aesperus, known as the King in Copper, a fearsome necromancer who ruled over the Moonsea hundreds of years earlier and survived as a lich who commanded the undead of the barrowfields as his slaves.