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Anonymous Posted 12 years ago
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Is this okay? I'm helping my daughter to transfer into a international school.
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to receive further information about xxx High School's University Acceptance Rate. Please do excuse me from my poor English,I am from Hong Kong and English is like a third language for me...I hope you would not mind so.I am originally considering to let my daughter transfer to xxx next year, but unfortunately I got stuck when I was browsing the high school profile. I am expecting my daughter to acquire good universities like NYU or more likely, UCLA in the future. However, the college choices' list provided on the high school profile page was not detail enough which kind of confused me.
Therefore, the first thing I would like to know is which are the top 5 Universities that most of the xxx's (past) students got in, again with the exact number of the students. Could you also tell me more details on the school life in xxx's High?For example the tests,subject choices as well as college enrollment. Although I know that the school website has already provided almost everything that I have just asked, but in consideration of my daughter's future studies in Taiwan, I do think it is necessary to ask for more details.
I would like to thank you in advance for this information.I await your prompt reply in great interest.
Yours faithfully,
Ms Liu
I am writing to receive further information about xxx High School's University Acceptance Rate. Please do excuse me from my poor English,I am from Hong Kong and English is like a third language for me...I hope you would not mind so.I am originally considering to let my daughter transfer to xxx next year, but unfortunately I got stuck when I was browsing the high school profile. I am expecting my daughter to acquire good universities like NYU or more likely, UCLA in the future. However, the college choices' list provided on the high school profile page was not detail enough which kind of confused me.
Therefore, the first thing I would like to know is which are the top 5 Universities that most of the xxx's (past) students got in, again with the exact number of the students. Could you also tell me more details on the school life in xxx's High?For example the tests,subject choices as well as college enrollment. Although I know that the school website has already provided almost everything that I have just asked, but in consideration of my daughter's future studies in Taiwan, I do think it is necessary to ask for more details.
I would like to thank you in advance for this information.I await your prompt reply in great interest.
Yours faithfully,
Ms Liu
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This is my correction: Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to request further information about *** High School's University Acceptance Rate. Please excuse my poor English - I am from Hong Kong and English is my third language. I am hoping for my daughter to transfer to *** next year, but unfortunately I got stuck when I was browsing the high school profile.
- This is my correction: Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to request further information about *** High School's University Acceptance Rate.
- Please excuse my poor English - I am from Hong Kong and English is my third language.
- I am hoping for my daughter to transfer to *** next year, but unfortunately I got stuck when I was browsing the high school profile.
- I expect my daughter to attend good universities like NYU or more likely, UCLA in the future.
- However, the college choices' list provided on the high school profile page was not detailed enough which kind of confused me.
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This is my correction:
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to request further information about *** High School's University Acceptance Rate. Please excuse my poor English - I am from Hong Kong and English is my third language. I am hoping for my daughter to transfer to *** next year, but unfortunately I got stuck when I was browsing the high school profile. I expect my daughter to a
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to request further information about *** High School's University Acceptance Rate. Please excuse my poor English - I am from Hong Kong and English is my third language. I am hoping for my daughter to transfer to *** next year, but unfortunately I got stuck when I was browsing the high school profile. I expect my daughter to a
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