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Anonymous Posted 12 years ago
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Is this okay?

Hello! Are there any mistakes in here?

Your personal data will be processed by the Consultant in order to process your order and to ensure quality and perform his or her duties. You have certain rights in accordance with the existing data protection laws, including opposing your data being used.

Much appreciated!
  

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Anonymous Your personal data will be processed by the Consultant in order to process your order and to ensure quality and perform his or her duties. Good start. I would advise you to make sure that all of the verbs in a list of actions have the same structure (This is called parallelism).

  • Anonymous Your personal data will be processed by the Consultant in order to process your order and to ensure quality and perform his or her duties.
  • Good start.
  • I would advise you to make sure that all of the verbs in a list of actions have the same structure (This is called parallelism).
  • " Anonymous You have certain rights in accordance with the existing data protection laws, including opposing your data being used.
  • The first half of this sentence is great!
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AnonymousYour personal data will be processed by the Consultant in order to process your order and to ensure quality and perform his or her duties.
Good start. I would advise you to make sure that all of the verbs in a list of actions have the same structure (This is called parallelism). "The Consultant will process your personal data in order to handle your o

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