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Oliver01 Posted 13 years ago
Grammar
Is "this" makes the paragraph vague
Some believe that; integrating people with ID is not beneficial for them because they might not actively seek help outside the institution, and therefore, continue to be isolated while living within the larger society. This would present the people with ID as abnormal people according to the standards of the society. This further prevents the people with ID from conformity to the society
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You need to spend some serious time reviewing and editing your text for conciseness and flow. Some believe that integrating people with ID is not beneficial for them because they might not seek help outside the institution but continue to isolate themselves , which would present them as abnormal according to social standards and further prevent their integration into society.
- You need to spend some serious time reviewing and editing your text for conciseness and flow.
- Some believe that integrating people with ID is not beneficial for them because they might not seek help outside the institution but continue to isolate themselves , which would present them as abnormal according to social standards and further prevent their integration into society.
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You need to spend some serious time reviewing and editing your text for conciseness and flow.
Some believe that integrating people with ID is not beneficial for them because they might not seek help outside the institution but continue to isolate themselves, which would present them as abnormal according to social standards and further prevent their integration
Some believe that integrating people with ID is not beneficial for them because they might not seek help outside the institution but continue to isolate themselves, which would present them as abnormal according to social standards and further prevent their integration
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Who needs to do that..I am slightly confused. The above is my writing.
Thanks for the reply.
Some believe that integrating people with ID is not beneficial for them because they might not seek help outside the institution (can you elaborate why semi colon is not necessary) (that's what Word Office suggested) (I also know it's sometimes hard to please Word Office)
Thanks for the reply.
Some believe that integrating people with ID is not beneficial for them because they might not seek help outside the institution (can you elaborate why semi colon is not necessary) (that's what Word Office suggested) (I also know it's sometimes hard to please Word Office)
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Oliver01In other words, is it too wordy now?Yes. I have no intention of competing with Word Office: it is ridiculous. Just go with what I have given you.
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