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Cboutin3 Posted 12 years ago
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Is this long sentence correctly structured and worded?

Laurana knew that the dragonarmy forces in Solamnia greatly outnumbered her army, but she still believed that she had the advantage since her forces were massed in one place while the enemy was scattered throughout Solamnia, and that by relying on surprise, speed, and the long range striking power of her aerial units, she could defeat the various dark legions.
  

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It's correct, but I would prefer breaking it up so I didn't have to concentrate so much to get the full meaning.

— Philip

  • It's correct, but I would prefer breaking it up so I didn't have to concentrate so much to get the full meaning.
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It's correct, but I would prefer breaking it up so I didn't have to concentrate so much to get the full meaning.
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Thanks, how is this revision? Laurana knew that the dragonarmy forces in Solamnia greatly outnumbered her army, but she still believed that she had the advantage since her forces were massed in one place while the enemy was scattered throughout Solamnia. Laurana thought that by relying on surprise, speed, and the long range striking power of her aerial units, she could defeat the various dark legi
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Much easier for me to read!
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