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Lisicong Posted 16 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Is this long sentence correct?
Because industrial waste water has been discharged into oceans, which increase the heavy metal content in water. While sharks are occupy the top of the ocean food chain, the heavy metals into sharks' body and be accumulated after they eat other fishes that lead to the heavy metal content in sharks are more and more higher.
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Hi, No. Because industrial waste water has been discharged into oceans, which increase the heavy metal content in water. This has no main clause.
- Hi, No.
- Because industrial waste water has been discharged into oceans, which increase the heavy metal content in water.
- This has no main clause.
- ) into sharks' body and be accumulated after they eat other fishes that lead to the heavy metal content in sharks are more and more higher.
- These clauses are not correctly assembled.
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Hi,
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Because industrial waste water has been discharged into oceans, which increase the heavy metal content in water. This has no main clause.
While sharks are occupy (<<< this tense is not formed correctly) the top of the ocean food chain, the heavy metals (missing verb?) into sharks' body and be accumulated after they ea
No.
Because industrial waste water has been discharged into oceans, which increase the heavy metal content in water. This has no main clause.
While sharks are occupy (<<< this tense is not formed correctly) the top of the ocean food chain, the heavy metals (missing verb?) into sharks' body and be accumulated after they ea
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Thank you so much Clive!!
I try to rewrite it ,is it Ok like this?
"Sharks are in top of the ocean food chain, they absorbed the heavy metals when they eating other kind of fishes. These heavy metals were accumulated that led to the heavy metal concent in sharks' body are more and more higher."
I followed your suggestion to change the long sentence to 2 shorter sentence
I try to rewrite it ,is it Ok like this?
"Sharks are in top of the ocean food chain, they absorbed the heavy metals when they eating other kind of fishes. These heavy metals were accumulated that led to the heavy metal concent in sharks' body are more and more higher."
I followed your suggestion to change the long sentence to 2 shorter sentence
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Hi,
"Sharks are in top of the ocean food chain, they absorbed the heavy metals when they eating other kind of fishes. These heavy metals were accumulated that led to the heavy metal concent in sharks' body are more and more higher."
"Sharks are at the top of the ocean food chain. They absorb heavy metals when they eat other kinds of fish. These heavy metals accumulate in their
"Sharks are in top of the ocean food chain, they absorbed the heavy metals when they eating other kind of fishes. These heavy metals were accumulated that led to the heavy metal concent in sharks' body are more and more higher."
"Sharks are at the top of the ocean food chain. They absorb heavy metals when they eat other kinds of fish. These heavy metals accumulate in their
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