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Jasmine89 Posted 14 years ago
Business & Finance
is this letter right grammatically and logically as formal business letter??
Dear Mr. Tom,
(General manager - DrugStores Owners Association)
We- ABC - would really appreciate your help with this.
I'm writing to complain about financial transactions that ABC has with mercy Hospital. As indicated recently, mercy Hospital is procrastinating in due payments, that is around 10-15% only from its account balance has been repaid. Despite the many claims and balance deductions were offered to the hospital, there is no response regarding this issue.
I suggest and on behalf of DrugStores Owners Association to make a survey about the Hospital's debts, and to insert its name on the black list in case no positive action is taken.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Thank you.
Your Sincerely,
Jasmine
ABC Drugstore
(General manager - DrugStores Owners Association)
We- ABC - would really appreciate your help with this.
I'm writing to complain about financial transactions that ABC has with mercy Hospital. As indicated recently, mercy Hospital is procrastinating in due payments, that is around 10-15% only from its account balance has been repaid. Despite the many claims and balance deductions were offered to the hospital, there is no response regarding this issue.
I suggest and on behalf of DrugStores Owners Association to make a survey about the Hospital's debts, and to insert its name on the black list in case no positive action is taken.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Thank you.
Your Sincerely,
Jasmine
ABC Drugstore
Top answer
Hi Jasmine, I fixed some grammar mistakes and reworded some parts, as seen below: Dear Mr. Tom, (General manager - DrugStores Owners Association) We- ABC - would really appreciate your help with this problem. I'm writing to complain about financial transactions that ABC has with Mercy Hospital.
- Hi Jasmine, I fixed some grammar mistakes and reworded some parts, as seen below: Dear Mr.
- Tom, (General manager - DrugStores Owners Association) We- ABC - would really appreciate your help with this problem.
- I'm writing to complain about financial transactions that ABC has with Mercy Hospital.
- As indicated recently, Mercy Hospital has been procrastinating in due payments; around only 10-15% from its account balance has been repaid.
- Despite the many claims and balance deductions that were offered by the hospital, there is no response regarding this issue.
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Hi Jasmine,
I fixed some grammar mistakes and reworded some parts, as seen below:
Dear Mr. Tom,
(General manager - DrugStores Owners Association)
We- ABC - would really appreciate your help with this problem.
I'm writing to complain about financial transactions that ABC has with Mercy Hospital. As indicated recently, Mercy Hospital has been procrastinating in due pay
I fixed some grammar mistakes and reworded some parts, as seen below:
Dear Mr. Tom,
(General manager - DrugStores Owners Association)
We- ABC - would really appreciate your help with this problem.
I'm writing to complain about financial transactions that ABC has with Mercy Hospital. As indicated recently, Mercy Hospital has been procrastinating in due pay
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