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FredrikKaspersen Posted 11 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Is this introduction too long?

I am to write an analysis of a photograph, using proper paragraphs. Am I better off writing a shorter version than the topic sentence I've written below, and how can I end the topic sentence in style without a goofy ending?

Upon examining Yinika Shonibare's artwork The Sleep of Reason Produces Monsters we perceive a vivid scenery.

And thanks for helping me out!!
  

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A shorter version would be better for a title or topic sentence. g. "The Sleep of Reason Produces Monsters" evokes an image of vivid scenery.

— AlpheccaStars

  • A shorter version would be better for a title or topic sentence.
  • g.
  • "The Sleep of Reason Produces Monsters" evokes an image of vivid scenery.
  • Isn't the original an etching by Goya?
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A shorter version would be better for a title or topic sentence.

e.g.

"The Sleep of Reason Produces Monsters" evokes an image of vivid scenery.

Isn't the original an etching by Goya?
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What's the theme of the paragraph you intend to write; is it "vivid scenery?"
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Hm.. Seem like it Alphecca, but I still have to analyse Yinika's photograph. Do you think it's good to mention Goya's original?

Yes, I shall describe the picture, teechr. What I see, what they look like in detail and what happens in the photo, etc. Is it too specific?
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FredrikKaspersenYes, I shall describe the picture, teechr.
Then you can use the topic sentence suggested by AlpheccaStars above.
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FredrikKaspersenHm.. Seem like it Alphecca, but I still have to analyse Yinika's photograph. Do you think it's good to mention Goya's original?
It seems like an appetizing opportunity. Do you think that Yinika knew about Goya's image?
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AlpheccaStarsIt seems like an appetizing opportunity. Do you think that Yinika knew about Goya's image?
Definitely.
Another question, how can I reduce the length of my sentences, but still keep them informative? I assume when it comes to essays that shorter is better.
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FredrikKaspersenI assume when it comes to essays that shorter is better.
If you write your entire essay in short sentences, then the essay will sound choppy and staccato. It is better to vary the sentence lengths to keep the reader engaged. But avoid lengthy run-on sentences.
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