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Futurehuman11 Posted 18 years ago
Grammar

is this grammatical? better with rewording?

Bearing this philosophy in mind, Roark aids his fellow man by showing life’s brilliance when one neither sacrifices himself nor others in the pursuit of happiness.

  

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Sounds good to me as is.
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Hi,

Bearing this philosophy in mind, Roark aids his fellow man by showing life’s brilliance when one neither sacrifices himself nor others in the pursuit of happiness.

I suggest this.

Bearing this philosophy in mind, Roark aids his fellow man by showing life’s brilliance when one sacrifices neither oneself nor others in the p
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I agree with Clive that "sacrifices" needs to be moved ahead. I think it's okay to keep "himself."
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