Is this an awkward sentence?
If you read this on a product description, does it feel 'awkward' and possibly long-winded? Maybe you have to read it twice?
"Lose weight and discover the art of cooking with your Crock Pot!"
Is there clearer way to write this sentence?
Thank you.
Top answer
I don't find it awkward or long-winded. If I had to make a fussy criticism, it would be that it is technically it is ambiguous between: 1. ] 2.
- I don't find it awkward or long-winded.
- If I had to make a fussy criticism, it would be that it is technically it is ambiguous between: 1.
- ] 2.
- [Lose weight and discover the art of cooking] with your Crock Pot!
- But I think common sense tells us that (2) is intended.
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I don't find it awkward or long-winded. If I had to make a fussy criticism, it would be that it is technically it is ambiguous between:
1. Lose weight and [discover the art of cooking with your Crock Pot!]
2. [Lose weight and discover the art of cooking] with your Crock Pot!
But I think common sense tells us that (2) is intended.
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