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Cboutin3 Posted 13 years ago
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Justarius became Head of the Conclave after Par-Salian retired, with two new mages elevated to the Heads of the Black and White Orders respectively, in the form of Dalamar the Dark and Dunbar Mastersmate.
  

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Justarius became Head of the Conclave after Par-Salian retired, while two new mages, Dalamar the Dark and Dunbar Mastersmate, were elevated to the Heads of the Black and White Orders respectively.

  • Justarius became Head of the Conclave after Par-Salian retired, while two new mages, Dalamar the Dark and Dunbar Mastersmate, were elevated to the Heads of the Black and White Orders respectively.
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Justarius became Head of the Conclave after Par-Salian retired, while two new mages, Dalamar the Dark and Dunbar Mastersmate, were elevated to the Heads of the Black and White Orders respectively.

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