Is this a good introduction?

1font00I02font01font00am wondering how to write a good introduction. What is needed in order to write a good introduction? How can i leave a good first impression on the examiner? 05000 Is this a good introduction? Or is it too long? How can i shorten it? Is there any mistake?02font02br
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01font00Oh, do i need to leave a line and start a new paragraph when one person talks? Or can i combine it into the paragraph? 02br
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00“Hey, you are such an imbecile brat!” I called out to my little brother, “quiet down will you! I’m studying!”02br
00“Oh, imbecile, is that a good word?” He stopped bouncing his basketball and looked at me. 02br
00“Yes, it is. Now, scram!” I waved him away.02br
00“What does it mean?” He raised his eyebrow suspiciously.02br
00“It means that you are a nice little boy. Now, stop bothering me!” I stared. My little brother nodded in agreement. 00Then, he turned his body around and screamed, “Mom! Sister called me an imbecile brat! I know it is a bad word!” I rolled my eyes, “Mom! She needs to be severely punished!” Fortunately, Mother ignored him. I am a sixteen-year-old teenage girl with short black hair. I am not a girl whom people considered as attractive. I have this irritating eight-year-old brother, Nat, who loves to disturb me, simply because he has got nothing else to do. Later that day, I figured out why Mother had been ignoring Nat. She was having her earphones on, listening to her favorite songs sang by Lionel Richie. What a clever Mother! I have this mother whom I consider as a hero. She is a very clever woman - clever at handling Nat.02br
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00While I was studying for my major exam in the afternoon, Mother suddenly appeared out of nowhere. 02br
00“Vanessa, I’ll be out for a while! Remember to look after Nat!” and Mother ran out of the house.02br
00“Oh no, not babysitting him again!” I slapped my hand against my forehead. The last time I babysat Nat, he blasted the television screen into smithereens with his green metal ball.02br
00“00Nat Ong Yi Wei! You better not try anything funny this time!” Nat turned around with three fingers up.02br
00“Cross my heart,” he smiled, showing his two little sharp rabbit teeth.02br
00“I don’t believe you,” I returned to do my revision.02br
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