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Kunsusuki Posted 12 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Is there something wrong with this passage?
My opponents claim that having a different friend in views and altitudes is the basis for conflicts and disputes in friendships. This is not true because if every person on planet thought in this way, we would have been living in tribes in which people are living together because they have something in common. This might provide a peaceful life, but it will never help in knowing the meaning of individuality. Besides acceptance is like an eraser of differences, it only lightens the good sides in a person's. It makes sure of the unexistence of perfection. So having a different friend from one's character will be like adding a new agitated electron to a stable atom, it will cause many changes, but most importantly it will always keep it energetic.
Thank you in advance.
Thank you in advance.
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Yes. It need extensive re-writing. Is that what you are asking for, Kunsusuki?
- Yes.
- It need extensive re-writing.
- Is that what you are asking for, Kunsusuki?
- You need to choose personal subjects and to avoid overusing the verb to be .
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Yes. It need extensive re-writing. Is that what you are asking for, Kunsusuki?
You need to choose personal subjects and to avoid overusing the verb to be.
You need to choose personal subjects and to avoid overusing the verb to be.
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kunsusuki Ok. How about the ideas?We are not here to judge your ideas; this is a language forum.
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Mister MicawberWe are not here to judge your ideas; this is a language forum.It sounds like a harsh answer Mister Micawber! What I meant was'coherence'.
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