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The strategies and methods used by Martin Luther King and Mohandas Gandhi to accomplish racial equality and eliminate intolerant acts depict these men from others. During their struggles, they were inspired by the idea of racial freedom; that all men have equal rights. No matter what challenges they faced, they were bound to overcome them, even if it meant dying for freedom. They both shared a common way of achieving freedom; referred to as non-violent resistance, where they would not respond to violence with violence but love. As a believer in equality, I wanted to find out the troubles they overcame; whether it was the physical pain they endured or the emotional and mental struggle they devoured without giving up. By reading their autobiographies regarding their movements for racial equality; I can determine how they dealt with mental, physical and emotional struggles. Last but not least, these penetrating life stories will help differentiate exceptional men from the history of humanity.
  

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I have underlined some vocabulary and grammar problems and struck out unnecessary verbiage: The strategies and methods used by Martin Luther King and Mohandas Gandhi to accomplish racial equality and eliminate intolerant acts depict these men from others. During their struggles, they were inspired by the idea of racial freedom : that all men have equal rights. No matter what challenges they faced, they were bound to overcome them, even if it meant dying for freedom .

  • I have underlined some vocabulary and grammar problems and struck out unnecessary verbiage: The strategies and methods used by Martin Luther King and Mohandas Gandhi to accomplish racial equality and eliminate intolerant acts depict these men from others.
  • During their struggles, they were inspired by the idea of racial freedom : that all men have equal rights.
  • No matter what challenges they faced, they were bound to overcome them, even if it meant dying for freedom .
  • They both shared a common way of achieving freedom , referred to as non-violent resistance, where they would not respond to violence with violence but with love.
  • As a believer in equality, I wanted to find out the troubles they overcame , whether it was the physical pain they endured or the emotional and mental struggle they devoured without giving up.
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I have underlined some vocabulary and grammar problems and struck out unnecessary verbiage:

The strategies and methods used by Martin Luther King and Mohandas Gandhi to accomplish racial equality and eliminate intolerant acts depict these men from others. During their struggles, they were inspired by the idea of racial freedom: that

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