Is there anything to correct or add?

Kindly, tell your opinion of this written-down thought, and where I should use commas and periods in it.

"I did a tear down to my body,
to check out my repairability,
and to see if I can discard what's inefficient if any.
I found out that I'm an energy,
wasted in captivity,
of a perceiver mind,
and a desires-alarmed body.

But there was some sort of power,
firmly bonding them together,
discarding faild,
and the unknown power was blamed,
it refused to give up on them,
but denied having responsibility of them.

What is that power?
And is it a commitment or an interest, that is alarming it, to hold them together?"