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Cboutin3 Posted 13 years ago
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Is the worded correctly?

Tol attended the dinner along with the many warlords, courtiers, wizards, and nobles of the empire’s elite.
  

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cboutin3 Tol attended the dinner along with the many warlords, courtiers, wizards, and nobles of the empire’s elite. There is something wrong. "Along with" seems too pedestrian for the setting.

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  • cboutin3 Tol attended the dinner along with the many warlords, courtiers, wizards, and nobles of the empire’s elite.
  • There is something wrong.
  • "Along with" seems too pedestrian for the setting.
  • It sounds like he attended the dinner, and so did those other guys.
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cboutin3 Tol attended the dinner along with the many warlords, courtiers, wizards, and nobles of the empire’s elite.
There is something wrong. "Along with" seems too pedestrian for the setting. It sounds like he attended the dinner, and so did those other guys.
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Yeah I know what you mean, any suggestions on how I should restructure it?
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Well, I don't know the situation. Who is Tol, who threw the dinner, and how did Tol come to be invited? Maybe, "Tol attended the emperor's dinner where were gathered all the warlords, courtiers, wizards, and nobles of the empire’s elite."
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