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Creativeguru Posted 11 years ago
Grammar

Is the structure of para correct?

And when they talk about the benefits our initiatives delivering to the society, it not only makes us duly proud, but also makes us more passionate about our work.

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As usual, you are too flowery and verbose.

  • As usual, you are too flowery and verbose.
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As usual, you are too flowery and verbose.
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We feel truly proud when they talk about the benefits our initiatives are delivering. It only makes us more resolute towards our work.
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Much better! But more can be done:

We feel truly proud when they mention the benefits of our initiatives, and it makes us more resolute in our work.
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Sir I just want to know if my second sentence was grammatically correct?
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CreativeguruSir I just want to know if my second sentence was grammatically correct?
Yes. It is.

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