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Kedra Posted 20 years ago
Grammar

Is the passage grammatically correct?

If you have a minute, please check the passage. Thank you!

With the Internet penetrating into every aspect of our life, it’s getting impossible to stay aside. You can’t ignore the World Wide Web with its millions of users, because it will ignore you. If you deal with vacation rentals business, but it’s not yet taken online, I wonder how you contrive to earn money…

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Kedra You can’t ignore the World Wide Web with its millions of users, because it will ignore you. I guess maybe you intended to say "or else it will ignore you"

  • Kedra You can’t ignore the World Wide Web with its millions of users, because it will ignore you.
  • I guess maybe you intended to say "or else it will ignore you"
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KedraYou can’t ignore the World Wide Web with its millions of users, because it will ignore you.
I guess maybe you intended to say "or else it will ignore you"
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Hi Kedra,

With the Internet penetrating into every aspect of our life, it’s getting impossible to stay aside. You can’t ignore the World Wide Web with its millions of users, because it will ignore you. If you deal with vacation rentals business, but it’s not yet taken online, I wonder how you contrive to earn money…

“I wish I cou
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Kedra, this isn't a grammar comment, but if I were a business owner, I'd find the sentence "I wonder how you contrive to earn money" to be condescending, and it would really put me off. It's like you're saying, "Oh, you foolish little person. You just don't understand how it's done, do you?"

May I suggest you instead say something about how you are missing an opportunity to vastly increas
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Thank you, Clive. The only question I have is about the verb "penetrate". I thought that it was an intransitive verb and required some preposition after it. At least this is what I saw in my PC dictionary. Now I am a bit confused.
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Hi, Grammar Geek! Let me thank you for such a good remark. I had some doubts as per this, and I am grateful to you for bringing this to my attention. I can not post the same message into several topics (say, grammar, information techlonogy), that's why I rarely request to check style of the passage, though I need it badly. I am not a native speaker and every advice concerning my english, either gr
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Hi again, Kedra,

'Penetrate' can be both transitive and intransitive. Maybe you need a more detailed dictionary?

I just offered suggestions without comment, but here is one comment. Never use two colons like this.

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Oh, I see. Thanks a lot for explanation.[Y]

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