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TOASTERshavings Posted 16 years ago

Is the iambic pentameter in my sonnet correct? if not how can I improve?

With vexation I scoff, for young lovers
Are painted lovely, cracked never be their hearts.
They bask in what perfect love uncovers
But faint, young, love because of mere lust starts.
Why do my eyes translate from blue to green?
Envy is an evil internal foe
But its controlling powers are unseen
Because lust is superficial, I know.
My cheeks, pink, rosy, and stained by salt tears
Are for: the boys I loved but never told,
The lost admiration over the years,
And the rejection that's turned my heart cold.
Depthless love is for the brash and young
Envy and confusion are tasted by tongue.
  

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The lines basically need to go duh-DUH duh-DUH duh-DUH duh-DUH duh-DUH Hope this helps

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  • The lines basically need to go duh-DUH duh-DUH duh-DUH duh-DUH duh-DUH Hope this helps
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The lines basically need to go duh-DUH duh-DUH duh-DUH duh-DUH duh-DUH


Hope this helps
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The blue lines are pretty close:

With vexation I scoff, for young lovers

Are painted lovely, cracked never be their hearts.
They bask in what perfect love uncovers
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what does that mean though!!!!
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