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Simonyys Posted 10 years ago
Grammar

is the grammar in this sentence correct

Dear xxx,

I would like to add 2 more persons for our reservation on dd/mm/yyyy, and the new total of the group member is 10 (Male:5 Female:5). Please confirm your acceptance by return mail.
Thank you for your cooperation.
  

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I would make a couple of slight changes for clarity: Dear ***, I would like to add 2 more persons to our reservation on dd/mm/yyyy. The new total for our group is 10 (5 males and 5 females). Please confirm your acceptance of this correction by return mail.

— Doctor D

  • I would make a couple of slight changes for clarity: Dear ***, I would like to add 2 more persons to our reservation on dd/mm/yyyy.
  • The new total for our group is 10 (5 males and 5 females).
  • Please confirm your acceptance of this correction by return mail.
  • Thank you for your cooperation.
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I would make a couple of slight changes for clarity:

Dear ***,

I would like to add 2 more persons to our reservation on dd/mm/yyyy. The new total for our group is 10 (5 males and 5 females). Please confirm your acceptance of this correction by return mail.
Thank you for your cooperation.
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Thanks for your advice, Doctor D. You have helped make it clearer for me.
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