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Cboutin3 Posted 12 years ago
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Is the end part of this sentence correctly worded?

Ariakan related his experiences and told of his dream to found an evil knighthood formed loosely around the Solamnic ideal and ensuring that his organization steadfastly clung to the notion of honor.
  

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cboutin3 Ariakan related his experiences and told of his dream to found an evil knighthood formed loosely around the Solamnic ideal and ensuring that his organization steadfastly clung to the notion of honor. Should that conjunction be "thus"? With a comma after 'ideal' it makes sense to me.

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  • cboutin3 Ariakan related his experiences and told of his dream to found an evil knighthood formed loosely around the Solamnic ideal and ensuring that his organization steadfastly clung to the notion of honor.
  • Should that conjunction be "thus"?
  • With a comma after 'ideal' it makes sense to me.
  • You can be the judge.
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cboutin3 Ariakan related his experiences and told of his dream to found an evil knighthood formed loosely around the Solamnic ideal and ensuring that his organization steadfastly clung to the notion of honor.
Should that conjunction be "thus"? With a comma after 'ideal' it makes sense to me. You can be the judge.
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Thanks for your help. How is this revision: Ariakan related his experiences and told of his dream to found an evil knighthood that was formed loosely around the Solamnic ideal and steadfastly adhered to the notion of honor.
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cboutin3Thanks for your help. How is this revision: Ariakan related his experiences and told of his dream to found an evil knighthood that was formed loosely around the Solamnic ideal and steadfastly adhered to the notion of honor.
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